It very much saddened me to find out that familial relationships in China have become so distanced, that the Chinese government had to enact a "visit your parents" law. Although it saddens me to hear how bad the relationships have gotten, I feel that it should be the individual's own choice on whether they would or would not like to visit their parents. Also, many people in China do not even have the money or time to be able to do so.
And frankly, I very much doubt that the reason the Chinese government enacted this measure to maintain filial piety. I agree with the idea that the government may in fact have enacted this measure for financial purposes. I feel that the government is just making things harder for the people while making things easier for themselves.
I was also shocked to here that there has already been several lawsuits where people have broken this law. In one such case, as stated in the article, a woman has been forced to visit her mother every two months and on major holidays. Since there have already been multiple of similar cases, I feel that there will be many more.
While I feel sad for the elderly who are lonely and are very distant from their children, I feel that this law is slightly ridiculous. Again, I must emphasize the point that I think that it should be the individual's choice to either visit or to not visit their parents, not the government's.
I thought the topic you chose was really interesting, along with your commentary. You also blended summary and commentary fairly well. One thing you could do to improve this is to make it less repetitive. Instead of just saying repeating you feel, go deeper. Explain why you feel sorry for the elderly but still think it is an individual's choice. Do you think that governmental and personal matters should be separated? Why or why not? What else could the government do to encourage filial loyalty? You could also relate this issue to America and/or personal experience, which I’m sure you have since you have a family. When you’re older, would you like to visit your parents frequently? Would you like your own children to visit you frequently?
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ReplyDeleteI totally think that it is really depressing to see that these family-related issues, as in relationships, resulted in a legal law of having to see one's parents every two months. I think you did a good job in commenting on this article with your own opinion on this topic; however, you could probably elaborate more into your thoughts since they seem a bit repetitive. Maybe you should write how many times you would visit your parents you get older or a situation that relates to this.
I enjoy how you always write about Asian news and rarely American news. It brings a sense of consistency and devotion to your commentaries. Anyways about the essay, you had a good amount of summary and commentary. However, you don't focus on analysis as much, leaving us a little clueless of why you thing your points. You should ask yourself questions like "if I say this, why is this a good point?" or "What is the significance of the topic I am trying to tell the audience?". I think these types of questions will help you on your analysis. Good luck :D
ReplyDeleteYou chose a very interesting and sad topic. You had good commentary but I agree with Joanne that you were a bit repetitive with the "I feel" . Also it's your article so I already know that this is all your opinion. Other than that you had a good article so good job :)
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